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Betterment of humanity entry by *tonks204:icontonks204:





Betterment of humanity entry

A bored mind. An empty mind. Some free time put to no use. But this is the moment. Ordained fate? A nudge from above? The divine guiding hand? An accident of the truest kind? Curiosity?

In a time before dates he sat, the hunt is over. He sits apart from the others for just a little while. That itch, niggling away, burning in his mind.

Burning. He’d seen the white flash. Stealing down from the great high up, falling from the thunder. He’d heard the flash stab down, the rendering of solid wood, the crackling and spitting after. He’d smelt the pine tree, resin boiling, popping flashing bright. He’d seen the all consuming light, the colours so bold they stayed in the eyes even after they were shut. And he’d felt the warmth. Delicious. Soft. He wanted it.

But then it was gone. The great pine a skeleton of black. Just one or two breaths of red and orange. They’d tried to carry it with them. But the heat just wouldn’t stay; the wind always scared it away.

That itch was back. In the front of his mind; waiting patiently for the moment to happen. When they walked the cliff-side last, what had he seen? Rocks had been loose, shaken in the rains. Little pebbles jumped free when we shuffled by. Yes. But what had he seen. He’d seen a little bright stone. Brighter than the yellow in the great flash. He’d picked it up. He’d found a few of them loose in the scree. He had picked them all up.

Nearly there, but what had he seen? The itch was insatiable; the word was on the tip of his tongue. He could feel it. What was it? What had he seen that day?

His brother. His brother too had found some bright stones. That overhang. It had looked like an Auroch’s head. They’d taken turns at throwing the bright stones at the rocky lump. His brother was winning, he’d hit it most. He had had to concentrate- a good shot was needed. The bright stone was flung hard and fast.

That was when he’d seen it. The dazzling rock had struck a dark patch, right above the Auroch’s nose. For the blink of an eye- the smallest of great flashes! His brother hadn’t seen it. It was time to go. But before departing he’d picked up a bit of the dark slippery stone and scooped up more of the sunny stones.

He hadn’t seen any more since. But he had found more of the dark grey stone in among the cliff debris. And now he was sitting here. A great flash- a brilliance of colour and warmth and beauty. Two rocks- a little spark brighter than the sun itself. He struck them together. Nothing. He felt stupid.

But that itch, that annoying tickle behind his brows, it was gone. This was the right path. So what was wrong. They felt wrong in his hands. He hefted them, aiming for comfort. The grey was slick, covered in watery ripples. It was large and fit his hand like nothing else did. The little bit of bright yellow was small and knobbly- it didn’t sit well, didn’t like being held. He rotated it, the biggest of the points sticking out away from his palm.

Breath held. Sitting exactly still. He tried again. His hands met. A sharp crack stabbed his ears. FLASH.

YES.

Elation like nothing before. It coursed through his veins like life itself. His head pounded and his heart beat so fast it nearly escaped.

But the flash had gone. Where? Why? He remembered the pine tree. The great flash had landed on the dead part. It had been dry and hollow and full of straw pulled in by nesting creatures. The bright glow had stated within. In the straw. The flashes needed something to eat to get big, to get warm.

He scraped together some dead grass and moss. Tense, he braced himself. He tried again. Gripping hard he struck.

CRACK.FLASH!

The little bit of bright landed on the grass. The grass turned brown and black. Grey haze floated away. The wind picked up just a breath. Orange. Yellow. The grass was not enough. The spark was alive and feeding. Growing before him. He grasped it I his fingers. The hot pain made him yelp. He dropped the little ball of orange.

The standing grass caught straight away. Soon it was as tall as his knee. Hooting and dancing he called the others over. He dropped twigs and little sticks and saw them devoured by the growing, writhing thing. Then he dropped branches upon the riot of colour and sound.

He looked at the stones of the floor. His own great flash. From nothing more than rocks. He grinned. They were already sitting round it, watching it, getting as close as the dared, fingers spread wide to catch the heat. A head turned asking what was this? Where had it come from? Is it here to stay?

He looked at the two rocks now in his hand.


It is fire. He said.
I made fire.
And yes. It is here to stay.

They made room for him as he joined them.
©2008 *tonks204
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an entry for a contest which can be found here -> [link] run by :iconmattiello: which i found interesting.

basically it asks for a piece based on one pivotal moment in human history. i chose the discovery of how you make the fire- the first technology and one of the most captivating inventions of all time, opening so many doors its unbelievable.
other firebugs will understand.

**edit** i have just moved this from scraps as i thought it unfair since this piece won me a subscription with third place in the contest. quite chuffed really, this is the first time i've won anything so :D

i borrowed an image from a film called Castaway as there is a beautiful moment when man discoveres fire all over again- i got the picture from here (since i don't kow who to credit it to) [link]

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~ladders1:iconladders1: Apr 5, 2008, 9:51:08 AM
FIRE!!!

*ahem*

very... i don't know how to describe it, but it's good
*tonks204:icontonks204: Apr 5, 2008, 11:38:46 AM
indeed. sometimes you just can't help yourself!!

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~Windancerx7x:iconWindancerx7x: Apr 10, 2008, 10:54:19 PM
haha! This was a good idea ^^
=D

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*tonks204:icontonks204: Apr 11, 2008, 3:08:56 AM
cheers.
i'm a bit of an outdoor person, and the first time i made a fire for myself i was so elated; and i wondered if everyone felt this exact same way, all the way back to the first time. 'course they did! its fire, lovely fire!

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~blisksamoht:iconblisksamoht: Apr 16, 2008, 10:14:31 PM
I enjoyed reading this, great submission. I also wrote of fire, but not in the form. A short poem, check it out if you would like, I like yours more~ it was fun. Good luck.

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*tonks204:icontonks204: Apr 17, 2008, 8:29:03 AM
glad you like it, i'll look your up :D

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=ArubanoTribalFire:iconArubanoTribalFire: Apr 23, 2008, 4:01:11 PM
lol nice job with Monsieur Hanks :-P Congratulations on third place!

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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.

Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!

Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.
*tonks204:icontonks204: Apr 24, 2008, 9:37:30 AM
cheers! lets face it, you cant beat the film.
and i didn't know about third place! *rushes over to go have a look*

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=ArubanoTribalFire:iconArubanoTribalFire: Apr 24, 2008, 9:41:50 AM
In my humble opinion, that movie is the National Aruban Movie. Me, being Aruban, and my other 2 Aruban friends have confirmed this.

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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.

Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!

Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.